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The Crystal Rose War

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Droplets of water sparkled as the girl raised her sword against the enemy.

Blood stained the pure white snow all around her, splattering all over her dress and beautiful face. Spinning around she parried off their attacks with a vengeance.

Blood floated through the air slowly passing by her face while she dodged another attack.

Jumping high in the air she did a twirling flip sending shards of crystal at the army.

Her eyes, crimson like the blood painting the dead in her wake, sparkled with an inner fire that burned her very soul. "I won't let you take this kingdom! Damned scum!" She yelled activating a magical attack. All around the army, the shimmering crystals expanded sending shards of ice racing to impale the enemies at alarming speeds!

Sparkling dust glittered from the grey sky, the girl let out a sigh while the remaining crystals floated near her as though trapped within time itself. Making a few necessary hand signs, with her free hand, she cancelled the magical spell. The crystals broke apart one by one. "It can't be helped." She raised the jewel ornamented sword, it's silver blade cast a glowing light upon her face while she held it at an angle mere inches from her nose.

"No one is going to live." A tongue licked the blood off her pink lips. She glared at the rest of the army charging them head on and not caring if more blood splashed her dress. Twirling and dodging, her body began to sparkle, the sparkles behind her became a ghostly image of herself. The 'twin' slashed the enemy helping her out thus making the army see double!

The snowflakes continued to fall as the last man standing fell to his knees then got his head chopped off in a blink of an eye. The 'double' disappeared while the real girl darted up the slippery stone steps.

A black shadowy warrior zipped through the corridor like a ghost, but was quickly silenced by the girl's blade. The place was crawling with the unholy shadowy knights.
Running down a maze of hallways she killed more of the soulless heathens.

"Shinku!" Shinku's red eyes blinked seeing her friend down the next corridor.

"Amaya." Amaya smiled seeing that Shinku was alright.

Amaya was younger than Shinku by two years, but was just as beautiful.

"Where are the others?" Shinku asked looking around the empty area.

"They are guarding Lady Cosmos and the princess, come on. We don't have much time!"

Shinku nodded then followed Amaya down a secret passage way leading to a back part of the Queen's chambers.  Cosmos cradled her infant daughter in her arms and looked up when a servant girl called her name. "Amaya? Shinku?"

Shinku did a quick bow, "My Lady we must hurry and get away."

Cosmos shook her head,crystal blue eyes filled with worry. "Not without my husband. Setsuna went to get his sister. I fear for his safety, the enemy could be lurking in the shadows still. . .Please assist him."

"Yes, my Lady." Shinku turned to leave, her long white blond hair flowing passed her waist line and almost to her knees fell over her shoulders like an elegant waterfall.

"Shinku!" A thunderous voice made her stop. "Come back alive and bring our King back to us." Shinku smiled at the old man she looked up to, he was their tough captain.

"Uh, Shinku. . .Be careful." She heard Amaya say and imagined the girl blushing with hands clasped in prayer.  

"I promise." Shinku departed, a white cape attached to her right sleeve fluttered majestically behind her. Sometimes when the light touched her soft strands, her hair appeared to have hints of pink, the color of spring flowers.

Cosmos smiled smoothing a curly dark brown lock of hair and stared back into her daughter's beautiful sapphire blue eyes that shined like the stars at night.

She had her father's beautiful dark brown hair, and yet her eyes were prettier shade of blue than what her parents had.

The baby girl laughed to her mother's joy, her pink chubby cheeks added to how adorably cute she was. "Don't worry, my flower. . . .We will see daddy soon." Cosmos planted a kiss on her forehead lovingly. "My precious, Elena."

The Goddess blessed her child with a beautiful name that shined brighter than the stars.

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"Mizuki, what is the meaning of this?"

King Setsuna's crystal blue eyes hardened at his older sister's back.

Mizuki stood on the balcony of her royal room the wind playing with long black strands of her wavy silky hair. It was black as the night sky and went well with her glowing pale skin. A sparkly white dress hugged her curves, yet the bodice was snug and revealed a bit too much of her breasts. She was a very beautiful woman with lips shiny and red as the deepest rose and a body that made both men and women crave her.

Even the most beautiful of women had thorns, his sister was no exception.

As beautiful as she was, Mizuki's sadistic nature made her very ugly on the inside.

"You know very well dearest brother."

"Enlighten me." Setsuna growled unsheathing his sword.

Mizuki chuckled, "Our kingdom is weak, filled with rotten warriors." Her golden eyes sparkled against the beauty of the falling snowflakes. "Don't you think?"

Setsuna stealthily moved across the room, "What are you going on about?"

Mizuki smirked just as branches of ice filled the room stopping Setsuna's surprise attack. Strands of black hair brushed gently against her heart-shaped face.

Setsuna's grunts of pain made the enchanting witch warm inside with happiness.

"Starting today. . .This kingdom belongs to me and no one will dare rise against me!"
Mizuki's golden eyes watched the snowflakes fall one by one.

Setsuna had managed to stop most of her attacks with a glowing a barrier surrounding him.

"No one you say?" Setsuna stumbled to his feet to Mizuki's surprise.

The King coughed blood as he hardened his gaze on her. "You forget my daughter is heir to this throne. It never belonged to you."

Mizuki laughed, "Oh, Setsuna. I haven't forgotten. She will die like the rest."

Angrily the King unleashed a string of magical attacks which were quickly blocked by Mizuki's stronger ones. The witch and the King faced each other in a deadly dance of life and death.
Prologue: Complete

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I enjoyed this read, I loved the personalities of the characters so far and the style of fighting :)

There were a few things that bothered me, however; such as in the beginning, the term "blood" seemed a little repetitive, and could a different word could be used in it's place, such as crimson. Another repetitive word was "beautiful" being used to describe the characters, and again another word or two could be used in it's place instead.

I liked how the beginning flowed, but a little in the middle and the especially in the end, it seemed a little rush. Especially during the second part, I've almost gotten confused on what was going on and had to go back and reread to see what had happened. I think more interaction could've happened between the characters as well before breathing off each paragraph into one line; maybe some thoughts could be added for us to see what's going through the king's mind, or what his sister was seeing outside. Some of the sentences ran together as well, some commas here and there may be necessary. The ending seemed rather abrupt, too, like it wasn't suppose to end there.


Overall, however, I see a lot of potential in this. The way you describe and the imagery you used is grand, I was able to picture what was going on well! Only the flow of the writing disrupted this a little, but in no way do I mean to discourage you and I do hope you continue with this. I see potential in your characters as well, I'm intrigued to see how they turn out and become as the story reveals more of itself. Good job!